Do you like my friends and I's lyrics for our rap song about life?

Your verse is alright. It could use some tweaks here and there but I don't really understand what it's about so maybe clarify that more. The other two people aren't good at writing. Their verses are not good and shouldn't even be tweaked but be rewritten. The chorus is weak also and could be a little longer. The song doesn't make any sense. The first guy is talking about how he didn't end up like his daddy, the second guy is talking about how he fell in love with some chick and was heartbroken, and your verse I don't really have any clue what you're talking about but someone hurt you or something. How do these all go together let alone apply to the over all theme/title "Fly Away"? Find a way to have the verses relate to one another. Your 3 verses are way opposite to one another and the second guys one about love is too weak when in a song with others talking about bad father-son relationships and a manipulative person. You are the only verse that transitions well into the chorus and connecting back to the idea of flying away.